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"scary scene" by =catemate:iconcatemate:



While playing cards in the family room, a dog barked. This would have made sense if there was actually a dog there. The Smith family paused for a moment, looking for the dog though it was not there.
The next morning the youngest daughter, Jane, told her father that she had heard the dog bark again in the room last night. So, the brave old man decided to carry out an experiment according to his beliefs.

While sitting in Jane's room reading her a bed time story, he recorded the following events. Just as he was finishing the story and giving up hope, the 'dog'  came in and started barking. Nobody moved, until old Mr Smith challenged it to speak English.
"Say my name! I know you can talk, now say my name!" The dog did not oblige and just barked again. "Say my name, Dr Smith!!"
A long pause, and then "Dr Smith" said the poltergeist through his daughter in an unhuman voice. Cold hands gripped her body as she began to levitate around the room. Jane's voice changed dramatically from a childs voice to that of an old man. "I died in this room, in a chair in that corner" the poltergeist spoke, pointing at the corner and levitated there. "My head hurt, it sent my body into a fit. I died alone with no family around for me." Jane suddenly stared at her father in such horror of what was happening to her before dropping to the ground, dead.
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Well, something a little bit different other than my 'every day photos'.
I thought this was a little too good to leave in my scraps to die, but am still unsure as to how people will react.
A little creepy, I know... such is life.
Last night (d/m/y = 1/10/08) I watched this show on ABC2 called "An Interview with a Poltergeist" and it scared the shit outta me! So I decided to write something based on it in my first class this morning :D
Well, she did ask us to write a half-page scene which would be enough to scare the class :) Unfortunately I didn't read mine out because I didn't finish it in time :( Took me forever to think of something, and then I remembered the show :P

Okay so the things that actually happened:
- the dog barking
- the poltergeist levitating the youngest daughter (but not during this particular "scene")
- the poltergeist possessing the youngest daughter (also not in this "scene")
- the dog saying the fathers name
- the ghost was actually a man named Bill who had died in the house in a corner in a chair (but not in the daughters room) from a hemorrhage

Slightly scary? Yeah..
Please tell me what you think :)
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i'm afraid to move from my chair for fear that something wicked will drag me around the room and kill me omg omgomg.... feckle.....

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"WHY" did this scare you, Cate??
It's one of those stories that's just creepy enough that it makes you uneasy, but not so scary that you can't sleep for a week. I think that's the best kind of horror :thumbsup:
lol, you understand me completely :)
thank you so much :hug:

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uh, well... demon possession or anything closely related to the topic scares me a lot :)
anything unlike it but still classed as horror (the saws, reeker, silent hill... etc etc) does not scare me :)

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ooooooooooh buts you knows it's mostly only fiction :hug:
still, last night when i heard recordings of Bill and saw photos of her levitating, i freaked out!!!

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You're welcome (: :hug:
that's radd! you also say poltergeist? :D because..; poltergeist is german, and i didn't know you say that too!
i really like the story, kinda scaring me but it's good :)

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lol, ja ich weiß xD
geist is ghost, but what is polter?
i'm glad you like it, thank you dear :hug::hug:
how's france???

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